The Breaking Bad pilot script is worth coming back to again and again. That teaser, with Walt in his underwear? How well it evokes suburban sprawl? Beautiful. This time, though, I was struck by the way Vince Gilligan uses sound effects. It's a great tool to keep in the bag, so here are a few examples:
1. ". . .ZOOOM! WHEELS plow right through the shit with a SPLAT."
2. "...Walt's finger stick to the surface. They pull loose with a slow, gluey SLURP."
3. "...a blood pressure cuff gets pumped with a WHOOSH-WHOOSH-WHOOSH;"
3. "SQUEAK-SQUEAK, SQUEAK-SQUEAK. Walt thumps up and down on his cheapie stair-stepper."
That's just from the first two acts. It's written with glee. It's not self-serious. It sounds like a guy describing something to a buddy at a bar--not dressed up for the written word. I guess what I'm taking away from this is: don't be afraid to throw down a good old fashioned SPLAT. It's suburban calligraphy.